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If the pen is mightier than the sword
Then a writer is a mighty man indeed
He is a master of words
And poetry is his creed

His simple phrases  
Placed in simple rhyme
Twist thoughts and emotions
Like a child with twine

He can make you feel
Textures unknown
Like the rough edges
Of a dragons bone

He can make you smell
Without a single breath
The cold rotting scent
Of a thing we call death

He can make you hear
A foreign sound
Like a loud-mouthed bard
In a renaissance town

It is with his words
He commits inception
With honest thoughts
And cruel deception

But before you know it
You will agree
With whatever he writes
Don't you see?

For the day is coming
When you'll find
That all your thoughts
Are from his mind

So heed this advice
Lest ye future grieve
The greatest lies
Are the ones you want to believe
This started as a poetic form a one of my characters monologues. After writing it and seeing how it actually became something. I decided to show it too a friend. Who loved it. I then showed it to another, more critical friend, who pointed out all its flaws, and that's with the edited version. I then set out to make even more edits, until finally I got this. Which I can honestly say I'm happy with. Do I think it has issues? Of course, too the extent that it genuinely bugs me. But for now, this is fine.
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LazyTeam Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
THis is seriously good *.*!!
Makerrcat Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2015
Thank you!
sumgie1 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013
I like how you took the idea "pen is mightier than the sword" further. :)
Makerrcat Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013
Thank you!. I always enjoy delving into old ideas that are often abandoned as cliche's.
LOLlyACE Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Student General Artist
This is really good! Its moral is only too true... I'm curious, did you break the rhythm on the very last sentence on purpose?
Makerrcat Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013
The answer to that would be a yes and a no. I did want the last line to stand out, however I'm not exactly skilled enough to intentionally manipulate rhythms. Thank you for the comment!
LOLlyACE Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Student General Artist
Well I think it was well done!

And you're welcome to have my comments! :D You deserve more.
Mordial33 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Makerrcat Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012
Mordial33 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome!
QuantumInnovator Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012
This is a nice poem.

However, I would be very careful about who you tell "The Pen is mightier than the sword." For example, I wouldn't say something like that at the funeral of an individual who died in a hail of gunfire. It would surely be perceived as untrue and insensitive.
Makerrcat Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012
Oh I'm sorry, it would seam I overreacted... Here I am talking about not being hasty and I go an say something like that. XD I guess I'm just not used to criticism. Again, my apologies and thanks for the comment.
Makerrcat Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012
Interesting concept. To be honest I never really thought of that, and in a way, find issue with your statement as well. This poem was approaching the concept of how a writer can convey thoughts and ideas too a person, and through that conveyance manipulate their readers into believing whatever it is the writer wishes. (I hate to explain away poetry but feel I must in this instance) In a way, even in the situation you described, it depends on the perspective your approaching it from. And again, is also an idea, although more subtly, being presented here. If you look at it from the perspective of... actually, I'm not quite sure what exactly you were getting at with the funeral example, but I got the point. However, you could also say that at some point, the orders that led said individual to die in gunfire were, at one point written. Also, that the ideas behind such a conflict were most likely at on point influenced by a form of writing. In the french revolution you will find the newspaper "Friend of The People" to be a source of much upheaval, or the undoubtedly numerous speeches written for Hitler before, and during WWII. Looking at the somewhat randomness of your statement I'm going to say your comment, If you would allow me to make such an assumption, comes from many misconceptions that have been formed over the years involving this long done too death cliche; much in the same way as with the YOLO movement that's been going on recently, and that you are fearing I am yet another ignorant who does not fully comprehend the wait behind such a statement as "the pen is mightier than the sword". Too which I must assure you I am not. I do fully understand the many situations in which such a statement may be scrutinized or appear offensive. As a person who has been around for the deaths of multiple family members, and has several other relatives in the military, one of which is currently experiencing a rather traumatizing case of post-traumatic-stress disorder, I must again state that in no way make such statements flippantly and with haste. This poem is merely a young mans commentary on the power of ideas, and the dangers of listening for too long, to the perspectives of one person without first taking into account the effects they have on you. To put this long winded rant to an end i would finally like to apologize for in any way suggesting a disrespect for the lives and situations of others, and thank you for your willingness to point out my plausible offensiveness. Also, I am very glad you liked my poem. Such words bring me great happiness.
HeAdMiNiOn19 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Student Writer
Wow. Just......WOW! This was startlingly beautiful, simple yet extremely effective. I love how you transitioned from almost this pride in being a writer to a much darker side of what ideas and writing can do to people. Simply amazing :)
Makerrcat Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012
Thank you so much! I really appreciate it.
HeAdMiNiOn19 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Student Writer
You are very welcome!
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